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Post by prymal on May 16, 2011 19:28:54 GMT -5
Phantasm 4.5: The Ice Cream Chronicles Chap.9: Prophecy Hey Gang, we are down to the final chapters here, just have 1, maybe 2 more to go!! Gotta take a minute here and give props-I want to take the time to point a couple of things out. Thanks to Scubasteve for allowing me access to his story 'Rocky Road'-a great read right here in Phantasm Community if you have not checked it out. I built upon Tanesha, Marie, and several situations from his story. Special thanks to Kristen Deem for her story 'The Portal' that you can find in 'Further Excursions into Oblivion', a great fanzine you should check out if possible. Kristen allowed me to build upon some ideas including 'Rebecca, Mother Morningside, and showing a different side to Jebediah Morningside', not to mention building upon some ideas and places. There will be more her of her story in the next chapter, and i will be sure to point this out. I thought it would be fun to build 'continuity' in these stories of the Phantasm World, and it's been a blast! Thanks for reading, and thanks to all the Admins for their work on this site, for the site itself, and thanks to Gopher for building us a Phan Creation Spot allowing us to let it flow!! More thanks coming in the final chapter!!-Prymal ![8-)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/cool.png) Attachments:![](//storage.proboards.com/3333002/thumbnailer/.jpg)
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Post by postmortem on May 16, 2011 22:10:32 GMT -5
Very nice work, Prymal! I love the stunning visuals you use--especially of Morningside on the red planet (the red light through the windows--so fitting and eerie), the moving statues and spinning crosses. All those little touches that really PUT the reader right into the moment! That shows the hand of a really good writer and a very cool imagination! Was a little sad to see Liz go--surely Mike would have sensed such a thing. But there's always hope for a return. lollol After all, you brought her back for this story. It's always a little strange to me to see how powerful a bond Rocky has amongst some fans. Have to admit I wasn't too thrilled about the character back when we were doing P3. But Gloria has matured into such an awesome actress (and singer?) over the years--and everytime I bump into her nowadays I'm stunned by how engaging and beautiful she is as a person--and I can see why she charmed so many fans after all. You do the character fine here. Eager to see how you proceed with Michael versus the Tall Man. There is so much potential there. Why stop at one more chapter? Hint, hint. Thank you also for the kind nod. That meant a lot. Rick was really ahead of his time when he drew us all together to do that anthology in 1999.
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Post by prymal on May 17, 2011 10:42:45 GMT -5
Thanks Postmortem, VERY generous words coming from a professional! The Intro and this chapter along with the final scenes have been my favorite to write. You guys were ahead of your time in the Anthology for sure! I still have some surprises left in this story, some may be a bit controversial, i dunno, a couple of my ideas i have never seen done in the Phantasm World and we'll see how they take. Of course, i have not seen everything done out there, so i may be treading on old ground, but i hope not. I would like to sketch some scenes from my story and post on here and i have another story i am VERY interested in writing...i hope it pans out! Sincere thanks-Prymal
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Post by prymal on May 22, 2011 14:38:45 GMT -5
Hey guys, to any out there following my Ice Cream Chronicles, i always post on Sunday or Monday, but this time is going to be a bit longer. I will post the next chapter next Sunday or Monday (30-31st). Sorry about the week lag, but i had a busy weekend! Sincerely-Prymal
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Post by scubasteve on May 23, 2011 10:23:10 GMT -5
Hi prymal, things have been crazy with me a bit lately and my PC is infected with a virus, so this takes a while to do with a phone. In short, I really enjoyed it with a very touching finish to it. I think your writing's really improved recently and looking forward to another piece.
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Post by prymal on May 23, 2011 18:20:05 GMT -5
Thanks for noticing, Steve! I really appreciate that and the fact that you liked this chapter. I took a little more time with this chapter, and i think it shows through a bit more. One of the reasons for the lag this week is that i had little time to write this past week and i would really like for the ending to be as well written as possible. This has been tremendously fun, but i would love to have a bit more time and preparedness before writing more. Unfortunately, time is in VERY short supply in my life right now. As much fun as The Ice Cream Chronicles has been, i don't think i did it the justice i could have, and i think i can write at least little better than what was shown. Thanks again for posting, i love reading the comments! -Sincerely, Prymal
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